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June 1, 2012 / Nikhil Jain

“Whatever I am”


Written for Dverse Poetics.

Whatever I am
I am the one,
like me in the world
you will find none,
I will not pray
so that you will like me,
will go out
and ask for coffee,

Remember the way
I am and will be ever
you will see my love

About the Poem:

First Stanza is rhymed verse and second stanza is haiku.

Would that you’ve enjoyed the attitude of lover……comments please🙂

32 Comments

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  1. Laurie Kolp / Jun 1 2012 2:51 AM

    A nice mixture of free form!

    • Nikhil Jain / Jun 1 2012 11:50 AM

      Thank you🙂

  2. tashtoo / Jun 1 2012 3:11 AM

    Really loved the haiku finish. Those little ones can be darn difficult…played with them in my own, but don’t think I matched the seamless transition.

    • Nikhil Jain / Jun 1 2012 11:50 AM

      Thanks Tashtoo…

  3. st3v3piper / Jun 1 2012 4:33 AM

    Very clever, especially the haiku, liked.🙂

    • Nikhil Jain / Jun 1 2012 11:51 AM

      Thanks st3v3piper…

  4. charlesmashburn / Jun 1 2012 6:03 AM

    Nicely done. I always enjoy poems about love.
    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2012/05/31/dreams-like-that/

    • Nikhil Jain / Jun 1 2012 11:52 AM

      Thanks!

  5. brian miller / Jun 1 2012 6:12 AM

    dont got to pray to make anyone like me either….like me for who i am or not at all….that is one you…because i am comfortable with who i am…smiles.

    • Nikhil Jain / Jun 1 2012 11:53 AM

      Nice one,brian sir🙂

  6. hiroshimem / Jun 1 2012 6:26 AM

    Profound… and you got me at “ask for coffee”! I didn’t expect that, and I love to be surprised!

    • Nikhil Jain / Jun 1 2012 11:54 AM

      Ohh thanks hiroshimem…

  7. seingraham / Jun 1 2012 6:55 AM

    This has a poignancy that tugs at the heart and I like it very much and I will try to remember the way you are, I will …

    http://nsaynne.wordpress.com/2012/06/01/when-you-are-leaving-me/

    • Nikhil Jain / Jun 1 2012 11:55 AM

      Thanks for remembering me whatever I am…

  8. henryclemmons / Jun 1 2012 7:11 AM

    I like. I really like. The combo was kool and loved the voice and flow. We are our love. Nice concept.

    • Nikhil Jain / Jun 1 2012 11:56 AM

      Thanks Henry clemmons…

  9. pandamoniumcat / Jun 1 2012 10:24 AM

    Interesting…and quite profound. Lovely job!

    • Nikhil Jain / Jun 1 2012 11:56 AM

      Thanks pandamonium cat…

  10. David King / Jun 1 2012 1:55 PM

    I suppose this is everyone’s prayer, but more beautifully penned than the norm.

    • Nikhil Jain / Jun 1 2012 9:18 PM

      People don’t have to change themself according to their love….thanks!

  11. Semaphore / Samuel Peralta / Jun 1 2012 6:46 PM

    Nikhil – neatly done. Free verse, to set it apart from prose, needs that underlying poetic structure – rhyme, meter, syllabication, linevreaks – and then it flies.

    • Nikhil Jain / Jun 1 2012 9:20 PM

      Let me know, have I followed your rules?

      • Semaphore / Samuel Peralta / Jun 2 2012 11:45 AM

        You’ve hit the essence of it, using formal techniques – the rhymed first half and haiku second half – as the structural underpinning of a free verse poem.

      • Nikhil Jain / Jun 2 2012 1:29 PM

        Thanks….it means, I followed your rules….🙂

  12. Archana / Jun 1 2012 8:13 PM

    and now nikhil will write a poem for me!😀😛

    • Nikhil Jain / Jun 1 2012 9:21 PM

      Are you serious?😛

      • Archana / Jun 2 2012 8:37 PM

        Yeah!! Why would i be kidding?

      • Nikhil Jain / Jun 3 2012 11:46 PM

        Ok then you have to wait…..maybe 1 year…lolz😀
        ‘coz I am going to study hard for 12th. Will be back after one year or maybe sooner than that.

  13. Heaven (@asweetlust) / Jun 2 2012 4:57 AM

    Nice take on the poetic forms ~ Maybe its me, but the attitude of the lover is not so charming, though I like the message of acceptance ~

    • Nikhil Jain / Jun 2 2012 9:28 AM

      Thanks Heaven…..and I didn’t made the attitude of lover as romantic and charming ‘coz if I will make that then the lover will be caught under the girl’s net and forget his identity and whatever he is.

  14. claudia / Jun 3 2012 12:43 PM

    smiles…if someone really loves, the other will feel it

  15. Nikhil Jain / Jun 3 2012 11:39 PM

    Ya….I agree….

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